Exhale
This is a piece I wrote in an attempt to evoke, in real-time, the moments of unforgettable dread, then tearful relief, that overcame me during an unexpected encounter in the Oregon wilderness. It is entitled “Exhale.”
Exhale
•
ahead
something big
black
BEAR!
standing in the switchback
scratching on a cedar
he sees me
stops
drops to all fours
he stares
I tense
stop breathing
he still stares
shakes his mass
snorts
chuffs
shakes his head
chuffs again
bares teeth
lifts front paw
stomps
as head rears
in grunted growl
I gulp air
his head lowers
stare deepens
holds
I’m stone
time’s stopped
until he turns
in powerful stride
shakes a snort
and lumbers away
I exhale
drop to my knees
and shake
…
rob kistner © 2007
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Beautiful – It must be nice seeing actual, out-of-the-zoo-nature. (I have got to escape L.A. – Sonoma is a callin!”
Mark Papale said this on November 6, 2007 at 1:14 am |
ah nice, for a second I thought it as a wife fearing man talking about the early morning rage ..
he he just kidding..
very nice.
Rambler said this on November 6, 2007 at 1:15 am |
scary! i like the way you end it, with you ‘mimicking’ his shake, though obviously with different reason!
greggo said this on November 6, 2007 at 1:21 am |
That left me with a lump in my throat. At a moment like that, I am sure I would quickly find religion! As always, excellent post.
Herb Urban said this on November 6, 2007 at 1:28 am |
wow that’s like in a movy. That’s what I call unforgettable and very scary but afterwards a great experience to be eye in eye with a bear.
Beautifully written
marja said this on November 6, 2007 at 1:34 am |
You capture the moment very well! Scary experience though awesome too and certainly unforgettable!
Crafty Green Poet said this on November 6, 2007 at 5:28 am |
woo – scarey stuff! A few words with huge impact
keith hillman said this on November 6, 2007 at 6:06 am |
The short lines and well placed breaks help build the tension…glad that bear went the other way!
Pauline said this on November 6, 2007 at 7:42 am |
Inhale…I was holding my breath throughout the read! Goodness, my heart is thundering. Thank you 😀
UL said this on November 6, 2007 at 9:14 am |
Wow – I, too, was holding my breath through the piece, and had to be reminded to exhale at the end, too! Very, very powerful, Rob. Thank you.
Hedwyg said this on November 6, 2007 at 9:16 am |
Very apt title!
gautami tripathy said this on November 6, 2007 at 9:20 am |
Great post Rob, you had me holding my breath with you.
Brian said this on November 6, 2007 at 9:20 am |
I was holding my breath reading that. My gosh, thank goodness he walked off.
Sara said this on November 6, 2007 at 11:52 am |
Mark –
We are definitely ‘in nature’ here in Oregon — but that one with the bear was a little too far in.
They tell you around here that you ‘never’ want to startle or stare down a bear. I inadvertently ended up doing both — but I’m still here…
imageverse2 said this on November 6, 2007 at 12:07 pm |
Rambler –
Thank you… and I can relate… 😉
imageverse2 said this on November 6, 2007 at 12:08 pm |
Greggo –
I’m pleased it touched you… it was certainly scary to me!
imageverse2 said this on November 6, 2007 at 12:09 pm |
Herb –
Thank you my friend…
Amazingly, my focus was so intent on the situation of the moment that it wasn’t until I was kneeling there on the path, teary-eyed and shaking, that a prayer crossed my lips… of thanks!
imageverse2 said this on November 6, 2007 at 12:14 pm |
Marja –
Thank you very much…
The entire event lasted maybe 2 minutes, but it moved so slowly in my mind at the time, that it felt like I was watching someone else’s drawn-out drama — sort of like a movie. It was unreal — until it was over… then I was in shock.
imageverse2 said this on November 6, 2007 at 12:17 pm |
Juliet –
Thank you… the experience stays with me. I can still hear the sound of the wind, feel the momentary impact on the path, when the bear dropped to all fours — I can even remember the smell of cedar.
What was very strange is the fact that these things all flooded in a rush into my awareness — in the aftermath… but they are indelibly imprinted in my psyche.
imageverse2 said this on November 6, 2007 at 12:23 pm |
Keith –
I’m pleased this piece was effective for you.
The event was traumatic for me! I’d seen bears before while hiking but I’d never startled and confronted one — dangerous stuff…
imageverse2 said this on November 6, 2007 at 12:32 pm |
Oh, to see the glory of creation, the black Bear and live to tell the tale. Well done Rob. It really made me glad I was not there.
love-Melanie-bd
beloved49 said this on November 6, 2007 at 12:34 pm |
Pauline –
Thank you for the kind words… 😉
My mind was feeding me very short bursts of observation at the time — no cognitive analysis of the situation… just staccato info to aid my survival. I tried to recreate that what ws happeneing in my mind at the time.
The analysis and evaluation of the occurrence rushed in only after the fact, when the immediate danger had passed.
imageverse2 said this on November 6, 2007 at 12:39 pm |
UL –
Glad it reached you… and you are welcome. 😉
imageverse2 said this on November 6, 2007 at 12:41 pm |
Oh Rob how I loved this…the poem perfectly relays the experience!
jo said this on November 6, 2007 at 12:42 pm |
Hedwyg –
I appreciate your gracious words — and I’m pleased the piece connected with you emotionally… that was my wish in writing it.
imageverse2 said this on November 6, 2007 at 12:43 pm |
Gautami –
Short and to the point o the moment!
imageverse2 said this on November 6, 2007 at 12:44 pm |
Brian –
Thank you! Glad the piece reached you… 😉
imageverse2 said this on November 6, 2007 at 12:45 pm |
Sara –
I’m pleased this work engaged you…
I was THRILLED he walked off!
imageverse2 said this on November 6, 2007 at 12:47 pm |
Jo –
Thank you… 😉
I’m glad I connected.
imageverse2 said this on November 6, 2007 at 12:48 pm |
Beloved –
Viewed now from this side of the event — it was unforgettable… but once was certainly enough for that level of intimacy! 😉
imageverse2 said this on November 6, 2007 at 12:54 pm |
Ohmigosh! Good thing you could still breathe! What an incredible scare and, for sure, unforgettable.
Tumblewords said this on November 6, 2007 at 2:13 pm |
Well done! You are lucky he didn’t chuff on over and eat you up, and take the left-overs home to his babies!
pepektheassassin said this on November 6, 2007 at 4:34 pm |
Tumblewords –
One time is enough for this kind of experience.
imageverse2 said this on November 6, 2007 at 5:41 pm |
Pepek –
Thank you!
The thought that I could have been ‘rob-ka-bobs’ for some bear did enter my mind later.
imageverse2 said this on November 6, 2007 at 5:42 pm |
that is all it would have taken for me!!!!!!!
paisley said this on November 7, 2007 at 5:39 am |
Oh my goodness! did this really happen to you! I’d be scared to death. What happened next?
Just Jen said this on November 7, 2007 at 11:37 am |
Paisley –
I now hike the mountains a bit more alert — but I still enjoy getting out in the wild here.
imageverse2 said this on November 7, 2007 at 11:55 am |
Just Jen –
Yes, it happened while I was walking a trail near my home, in the Mt. Hood foothills. The trail runs parallel to the Clackamas River about 20 minutes from where my wife and I live.
What happened after was — I stayed on my knees, perfectly still in the middle of the trail until I regained my composure. I then patiently listened until I heard no more noises made by the bear rustling in the undergrowth.
I then stood and walked very quietly back along the trail from whence I’d come — got into my car — and drove home… still mildly in shock.
You can check out the Clackamas River here.
imageverse2 said this on November 7, 2007 at 12:03 pm |
Relaly enjoyed this piece. That feeling of dread mixed with pumping adrenaline certainly can leave one fallen to their knees and shaking when it is over. I freak out over racoons when I am walking the dog. It is a good thing I live in a more city suburb.
Michelle said this on November 7, 2007 at 2:22 pm |
dropping to your knees and shaking?? I would be Pooping Rob! OH MY! How Unforgettable!
lucy said this on November 7, 2007 at 2:59 pm |
Michelle –
Thank you so much for the kind words!
Well, we got raccoons too… 😉
imageverse2 said this on November 7, 2007 at 3:07 pm |
Lucy –
No, I remained continent — bear-ly… bad pun. 😉
Pooping will ward off bears, so they say… ?
imageverse2 said this on November 7, 2007 at 3:11 pm |
I love it. My reaction would probably be less poetic. Something like “Oh, shit!).
I’ve only seen a bear in the wild once (when I wasn’t in a car) and it was far enough away that I just took off. That was in Yosemite.
Sarala said this on December 3, 2007 at 8:03 pm |
Sarala –
Reasonable response… 😉
…confronting bears is a short lived hobby…
imageverse2 said this on December 9, 2007 at 1:28 am |